Above I highlighted all of the key terms, transitions, and examples of repetition in my essay. It made me realize that I am transitioning a lot, which probably means that I am talking about to many subjects and that I need to focus my writing a little more. I feel that these transitions are not difficult to understand because they are well written.
I would have liked to see you highlight the different terms in distinct ways so that you could analyze which strategies you seem to use more than others. 2/3